A poem of the stress of disease upon the body and mind

Discussion in 'Spirituality/Worship' started by Landy, Mar 22, 2006.

  1. Landy

    Landy New Member

    SWEET MELODY UNDER STRESS

    Let me in the side door, cried loudly
    the roars of stress, I can better assist
    you from within, prompting total unress.
    Let me in and very soon I'd be fully in control.

    Let me have my way and soon
    through your nerve ends
    I'll be able to freely roam.
    Think of all the havac I can play
    throughout your chest,
    you'll think it is a heart attack
    but it's only me at my best.

    Once I've had my way for yet another day
    you'll never know what hit you
    and I'll be here to stay.

    Move over strength here comes weakness
    my best friend and lots more
    we're all here to assist you,
    please open up that door.

    Look out, what the H---is that
    How can I promote unrest
    when this soul is on its knees
    and totally at rest.

    What strength has come against me,
    as I was about to spring.
    The Bible was open,
    the bird about to sing.

    Instead of another cup of coffee
    which would ease up my way
    her prayer book is open and I hear
    her pray. Sounds of sweet discusting
    melody. I will have to flee.

    I'll be back tomorrow
    with anger and despair.
    You may have won this battle,
    but we'll see what you do with a 'Flare'.

    Once I've had my way for yet another day
    you'll never know what hit you
    and I'll be here to stay.


    Author's Comments:
    "With Fibromyalgia your nerves go crazy and today I was
    over the edge. Twitches. Thought of this poem after quiet
    sobs and tears and prayer. God is Good."





















    [This Message was Edited on 03/22/2006]
  2. morningsonshine

    morningsonshine New Member

    Nice poem, I really like the title!

    This really is a spiritual battle, day to day.
    I forget that, or i feel to tied and weak to put up a very good fight!

    I would like to see the author try the word, soul, in the fifth paragraph down, in place of body.

    I know it's not a big difference, but it seems to imply the whole person, instead of just the outer shell.

    I hope that doesn't sound offensive, i really like the poem. I've been in that place before!

    I pray you have a restful and peaceful day today!!
  3. Landy

    Landy New Member

    Thank you so much for your input. I've
    implemented the change and you are right.
  4. morningsonshine

    morningsonshine New Member

    I suppose i'm going to have to be brave and post my poem, well kinda a poem,
    If i can find it!!LOL
  5. Landy

    Landy New Member

    Please let me know when you've posted your poem
    and I have so enjoyed our back and forths today.